feedback

1. Use more issue to support my argument.
2. Those issue or real example need to be summary in a short word by myself, instead of directly citation in text.
3. I need to use more scholar essay or research reports from authoritative institutions in the text, there will be more powerful if I use that. The article will become more convincing.

In assignment 3, I should more in-depth research and digging on the topic of my article by reading more research report or scholar article or focus on relevance news and data, rather than just a one-sided understanding.