I find that my writing needs to be more clearly organized and structured.
Recognize the importance of providing more diverse perspectives and supporting my arguments with relevant examples and evidence.
Needed to understand and analyze the question in more depth.

Areas for Improvement：
Content Enrichment: Conduct in-depth research and collect sufficient relevant examples and data.
In-depth discussion with real life case studies.

Language and Clarity: Avoid jargon and complex sentences. Choose clear, concise language.
Proofread and edit my work for grammatical, punctuation and spelling errors before submission.

Structure: Plan the structure of my essay at the beginning.